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Killrict Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2011
This... is amazing. I laughed, I cried, I felt like I knew the characters. This has everything.

I'll admit, when you first introduced Josaif, I had some problems with it, but as I read more, I decided that it was one of the best portails of god I've ever read. I do have one problem with it, and it's nothing huge, but in Rise to Power part 6 Josaif says-
“That’s my girl.” He drew her into a hug. “And I will help you to stop fearing him.
Trust me, baby.”
it's a beautiful moment, but the term 'baby' just seem out of character. I would understand 'my child' or some such endearing term, but 'baby' just seems to have the wrong connotation here.

Still, reading this has been a huge inspiration to me, and the fact that the first book has been published (can't wait for more) fills me with yet more hope. I'm planing a huge writing project, and although it won't be nearly this big, this has inspired me to see it through. Thank you so much for sharing this, I can't wait to see what you come up with next.
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Michelay Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2011  Professional Writer
thank you. =)
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Killrict Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2011
^ that was supposed to be in the silver fox writing section ^^;
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